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General Chat / Re: Car Wreck
« on: December 30, 2007, 05:35:55 am »
What's zLib?

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Writing / Re: Short Story: In the Devil's Mind
« on: December 02, 2007, 10:01:49 am »
Yeah... sorry. :(
It's just that, I wanted to read that story, and couldn't... and I didn't think that it'd be bad to want to do that, no matter it's age... and this one, nobody replied to...
Sorry, won't do it anymore. :(

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Writing / Re: Short Story: In the Devil's Mind
« on: December 01, 2007, 10:26:53 am »
Definitely imaginative.
It could use some redwriting... it seems as if it were written in a hurry, and the writer didn't have the time to go back and see if everything flowed smoothly, or if it made sense.
But the main picture was intriguing, and different. Original, and with interesting details.

Though, where it breaks doesn't really make any sense at all...
Here, I think there should be more information on how the story leads up to the moment described in the second paragraph:
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... as if she wasn't even human. She had thought that for a long time. The girl never knew her father. He was a mystery to her. So she attempted to replace him. But Juros knew who he was.

It was late that rainy Sunday night, not even the sound of the Mozart's Symphony No. 40 could calm her down. The young girl had been rudely interrupted in her sleep by a nurse who was trying to give her an injection to ease the pain. The bunny eye patch shifted to her left eye, revealing an emerald-coloured eye in its place.

You don't mind the suggestions, do you?

My only other complaint is the cursing... I suppose, though, that cursing is just one of those things that depends on the individual, as to whether it's okay or not...


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Writing / Re: Critic alert! ^^
« on: December 01, 2007, 09:55:13 am »
I can't read it all... :P

Er... help? ':D

Though what I could read sounded good...

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Art / Re: Art challenge
« on: December 01, 2007, 09:01:18 am »
Well... I could try, something... :)
But I probably won't have any more luck than you. People don't really participate in this stuff, when I do it. :P
Also, school is here, and all... but, just for the fun of it, and because I haven't done a lot as far as posts are concerned:

A dream that you've had.
Or, if you don't recall any dreams of your own, a dream that someone you know had, that will let you share and that hasn't already been shown.
I dunno'... just some random thing. ;D

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General Chat / Re: Car Wreck
« on: December 01, 2007, 07:44:11 am »
This conversation, in the other forum, whent on a long time... actually, it is still going.

Ha! My first post!
Hehehe.... :-[

Anyway... how're you feeling now, in comparison to the last time I asked?
It wasn't that recent, that I asked... :P



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