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I still have to see that movie. (I will, I promise!) What RPGs do you play? I'm just starting to learn D&D.

Slumdog was really good. I actually agree with the academy on this one, it deserved best movie.

We used to have a pretty good D&D campaign going, but the DM decided his life was too stressful for him to run it properly. Now we're playing Legend of the Five Rings, which is basically feudal Japan. I've never played it before now, but it's very interesting and fun. Much more tilted toward the role-playing spectrum of the genre, as opposed to D&D's "I kill things 'til they die" approach.

I'm happy because tomorrow I'm off to see Slumdog Millionaire, followed by a long and wonderful night of role-playing games, obscure geek jokes, and home-cooked food with my friends.

Also happy because I'm writing all this in the middle of class, in the front row, and the instructor probably thinks I'm taking notes.

At Thegoddessapprentices@yahoo.com.
TGA is a comic about three girls who are chosen to be the apprentices to the goddesses of fire, earth, and water. The water apprentice, Ruby, is a furry, witch I call a Kai.  She has a twin brother who will become an adventurer while she's out being an apprentice.  Zanna, the succubus, is the fire apprentice.  The cubi are probably the closest you will find to humans in it.  And Tati, the earth apprentice, is a fae that was raised in a community of kai that would be a kind of Amish.  the fae are more like moorfolk, switching their misfits for human babies.  but they all meet up, and go questing and stuff. what more would you like to know?

Okay, now you have a premise. But where is the story going? What does "questing and stuff" entail? What is the climax of the story? What are the main conflicts? Who opposes the three protagonists? For that matter, why do goddesses need apprentices? Where do the goddesses fit in within the world? Are they the creators, the guardians, or just spirits doing this for the hell of it? If the Fae switch human babies with their own, where are the humans? These are just a few of the many questions you need to answer, before you are even given the challenge.

You don't have to give away everything in the story, so long as you can answer these questions to yourself, but if you don't even know where your story is going, how can we trust you to update reliably?

Also, what Xepher said.

At Thegoddessapprentices@yahoo.com.

It's a comic about three girls who are chosen to be the apprentices to the goddesses of fire, earth, and water.  Actually, it's more like a furry, a fae, and a succubus. 

I'm not sure how to convince you that it's original.  so...... ya.  I'll think of something.

I don't have a previous website.  I tried webs.com, but the layout is really bad there.

Oh, could I do  'The Challenge'? I don't think this really gives much infomation on my comic.

You're right, it doesn't give much information. In fact, it doesn't give any information at all. Even if you are doing the challenge we still need to know a) what you'll actually use the space for, b) how reliably you will update, and c) that you read and understand the rules. Considering this has almost no information aside from barely two lines of actual description, no desired username/URL, and no content whatsoever, I'd have to say you've failed on all three accounts.

I'd love to have you prove me wrong.

Necrothread is necro'd...

It's been two months, hun. I don't think this person's coming back.

I didn't laugh.

Really, he didn't even explore the possibilities of a Warble continuum or its obvious connection to Yugoslavian tourism.

Your art style is pretty good, very pulp-cartoon-y.

...Actually, I really have nothing incredibly bad to say about this one. :\ That's so unlike me.

I do have one question though. The project in question is the webcomic you linked, correct? The wording on that was a bit vague...or maybe I'm just not reading it right.

You don't seem to have many pages yet, though...how can we be sure you'll update as regularly as you say? (haha I'm such a hypocrite)

That's all.

Wow, someone actually chose the Challenge. NOBODY chooses the Challenge!

I am wondering though, you say you're not good at drawing right now...so when exactly would the website see any action?

Letting my grammarnazi side out for a second....akkgh, no, it's too painful, sorry. Can't do it.

Oh, oh, oh, can I ask my own question? you don't have to answer it since I'm not Xepher, but its late and I'm hyped up on strawberry soda.

6: All K'niffs are Greebles. all Greebles are Fizzgins. Some Fizzgins are Warbles. Therefore, what is the name of the man who drives the double decker tour bus in eastern Yugoslavia?

...Like I said. Soda.

But also, I should note, someone else here (and I was hoping ticky would run in and make one of his epic analyses) might view this all in an entirely different light.  My classification of what constitutes porn/erotica may be prudish or slutty, depending on their view.

Awww, you flatter me griever ...You do realize I'm female, though? Ah whatever, the internet mixes peoples' genders up a lot anyway XD

To be honest though, I didn't really post anything because you kind of posted exactly what I was going to say already. I don't consider myself a prude, and I find no problems with sex in any media, but I think you hit the problem here exactly. I'll try not to step on your toes, so I'll just add everything else I would have said.

That is to say, it is generally considered writer's "etiquette" that unless you are writing full on pornography, the sex scenes are more composed of innuendo and metaphor than actual sex. It makes them more fun to read, and lets a wider audience enjoy the story, instead of just the ones that don't giggle whenever someone says "sex." Of course most of the (extremely lax, if I may add) rules of writing get lost in the internet, but that still brings up the question of "when does sex become porn?"

Well, maybe I am a bit prudish, but my idea of when sex in writing becomes porn is when it becomes graphic sex, because of how I was taught. And boy oh boy, those parts with the little [m] next to them sure sounded graphic to me. I've seen some great stories with sex in them, where the word "sex" or anything really pertaining to sex was never mentioned. The author still got their point across, and even if we didn't see every little detail of the act, we all knew what happened and who did what.

I would say that you could try to edit out the more graphic parts, but no one else has commented on the rest of the work.

There are two words that make my blood curdle, that make every fabric of my being cringe and move two inches to the left: Song fiction.

Which isn't to say that songfics are bad, it's just that...well, they're bad. I have yet to meet a writer that didn't have a very specific set of music that they listened to for writing, I have about twelve playlists on my computer at any given time reserved for just that. But that doesn't mean you have to actually put those into the story. I mean, really. If I wrote something while watching, say, The Wolfman, I'm not going to tell people in a big bold title up top, "WATCH THIS MOVIE WHILE READING THIS OR YOU WON'T GET IT." No. If you wrote it well enough the writing itself should convey exactly what you wanted it to. Not that I'm saying this to just you two, I'm saying this to all songfic writers out there.

As an added "bonus" to songfics, if your audience doesn't listen to the exact same music that you do, then they really won't get it. Whilst skimming through every piece of writing on your site I found...maybe five songs that I knew, max. The rest of it was just radio static running through my head.

To be honest, I don't think either of you write very well at the moment. Maybe it's because I'm actually trying to major in creative writing and I'm overly critical of everyone and everything for it, but that's what I think. The sex is bordering on porn and doesn't fit well with the stories surrounding it at all, and the surrounding stories are constantly jerked around by music I don't listen to and, if I may be frank, writing that needs work.

As a side note the art is actually pretty good, and I love your work with b&w line.

As a quick critique on the technical side of things: USERNAMES CAN'T HAVE CAPITAL LETTERS. Sorry to break out the caps, but I'm very tired of telling this to people, as it can be found if you look around the site. tam=good. tatsnmems=good. TaM=bad.

Also, I would have recommended learning HTML and FTP (Though you'll need SCP for xepher) before you applied, so you could have at least had a basic knowledge of how to make a website. Too many people come in here without any prior knowledge of how to make a website work, and it really just makes things harder for them.

There you go, griever. One tickyhead supreme, ooooorder up! I gotta run.

(EDIT: Wow, I make a lot of grammar mistakes when I'm rushed. Fixing!)

Darn, yny-u got to it first!

But I'll repeat it anyway; in order to use the wonderful webhosting here at xepher.net you're going to need knowledge of html, css, and/or php. There's no "instant website" templates. You'll also have to know how to upload your content to the server via SCP, which is like FTP but better. Much better.

If you didn't understand anything I just said, then you're going to have problems.

(As a side note, why does the archive have a header with the Heroes DNA/fake kanji logo? Just wondering.)

Wow, Chrome sure is different...but in a good way, I suppose.

It's certainly a more streamlined view, it's like you're constantly in f11 mode. I wonder what would happen if I...

Nothing. That was uneventful.

If I wasn't burned out from college I could probably make four or five paragraphs out of this, but here's a list instead:

• Do you have actual comics already?
• Can you make a site so we see them?
• On that note, can you even make a site? do you understand HTML, CSS, and/or PHP, and how to upload to a server via SCP?
• Do you have any other examples of your work that we could actually see?
• Did you even read the part in the rules where it says you have to have all this stuff for us?
• If you do not have anything to show us, did you read the part in the rules where Xepher clearly states that he does not accept people who only have "ideas" and no actual content, unless they're very, very special?
• Do you realize that your URL can't have capital letters, so the username "Next" in itself is an error? (everyone gets this one wrong, but really...it's in the rules, you're supposed to read it!)

I'd try to be nice and comment on your work to keep this from sounding like I'm an evil witch who wishes to rip your soul apart (I'm not, honest), except there IS NOTHING HERE. To be frank, even the plot summary you gave sounds so incredibly generic (Death Note, anyone?) that you would have to excel in plot twists and enjoyable writing to make it interesting.

Try again, please.

I really, REALLY wanted to try that one, but then the new semester kicked me in the butt.

Well the application isn't that bad at all, so I won't do my usual thing of completely ripping it apart in a futile attempt to eat your soul. I would like to see your work somewhere (there are at least a few websites for uploading fiction, are there not?) since it sounds like you two will be sharing the space. Also the png is all well and good, but it would be even better if you could upload it to another space (nothing fancy, it could even be *shudder* geocities for all I care) so we can see for ourselves that it works.

Much like a similar application I'd also like to see Kia herself come on to say that she's on board for this, just to know you aren't duping us. Totally optional, of course. I'm just the paranoid one.

I honestly hope this all ends with you in a comfy little chunk of webspace here, but I'd like just a little bit more content from you.

now it's Xeph's turn. Have at it!

[He]

... I don't get it. ^^;

Why is he/she/it going to the doctor's? Because of the werebears?

Like the sketch tho, the monster looks really good!

He has a black eye, an arm in a sling, one wing ripped off, and the other wing bandaged.

He obviously isn't there for a general check-up, if you get what I'm saying.

JM: No problem, no worries! That stuff always happens when you least expect it...and always at the worst possible moment.