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Title: Golden Crystals Application
Post by: golden-crystals on January 10, 2006, 08:25:13 am

Username: golden-crystals
E-mail: kmo597@longwood.edu
Art site: http://passion-assassin.deviantart.com
Temp site: I don't have one for this specific series of art, but I do maintain a journal, where I independently control HTML and update fairly often. I can do my own layouts, and I know the general HTML codes, so it's nothing real new to me ^^.
The gist of the story: It begins as a sort of Alice in Wonderland with our first character, Samantha. While walking her dog, King, to her cousin's house, King spots a rabbit, and as any dog would, goes nuts and starts dragging Samantha behind him. There's something strange about this rabbit though, but Sam doesn't really get to think about that as she is dragged into a patch of woods. She slips on a rock and knocks her head on the solid ground, promptly passing out.

She dreams of a strange world. There's a brother and sister that are fighting over her, a pompous princess who thinks Samantha's a terrorist, two men that seem to think she's someone else, and this girl, who seems insignificant, but is friendly nonetheless. This world is Tutom.

We find out that this world was created by a group of gods who gave certain gifts to their favored people in different countries, in the form of elemental power, harnessed through a crystal embedded on their forehead. Gods were allowed to influence and bestow gifts, but never appear to their people. Well, one goddess broke that rule by falling in love with the king of her people, and he, in turn, fell in love with her.

He, Syde, lost his grip on sanity over the years and neglected his people because he was so love-stricken, thinking that everyone was attempting to claim her. So, his country descended into anarchy and its armies started to attack neighboring countries. This led to a huge world war and ended with Syde's country being shattered to pieces.

Syde, although insane, still sought revenge, sending his children to kill the heirs of his enemies. A nice thought, but his children didn't go through with it. Instead of killing them, his daughter kidnapped two heirs. Her brother brainwashed both, throwing one into a hostile country where she would be a slave, and the other simply vanished.
Fourteen years later, we have Samantha (actual name: Whini) in the midst of this, confused out of her mind. Whini discovers that she is one of the missing princesses immediately upon arriving in this foreign land. Several key characters are revealed at this time, including the identities of the two men (visiting princes), and the other missing heir, a slave girl going by the name Youthere. This motley gang decided to travel back to one of the prince's homelands, where they will be safe from rebels, a hostile army, and the children of Syde.
That's the basic story line, so in summary it's an odyssey type thing.

One more thing, sorry ^^. Everyone had a crystal on their forehead that bestowed them certain powers (a gift of the gods), but as time went on, power corrupted people, and leaders were appointed. Those who weren't high ranking were forced to rip their crystals out. Few people loathed this idea, refusing to do so and rushing into hiding. The only people permitted to have crystals in modern day Tutom are Royals. So the band of traveling heroes have to keep their bloodlines secret because anyone could be a rebel, or easily mistake them as rebels.


Here are some samples of my artwork. They are of the characters featured

in this comic.

These were inspiered my the french artist, Alphonse Mucha

A background of sorts

Just a sketch

Thank you so much for your time!
Title: Golden Crystals Application
Post by: golden-crystals on January 14, 2006, 07:12:05 am
Somebody tell me what a Diprotodon is, please =(
Title: Golden Crystals Application
Post by: golden-crystals on January 20, 2006, 04:51:59 am
Welllllll, let me tell you a little bit about what I plan to do. I'm getting the site ready on a different server, but it's coming up slow because of my classes and all, and of course, what Life I have.

So, along with the slow completion of the 'mother site' as I like to call it, I also have 24 pages of the comic ready to post. I don't plan to post it all at once, I was thinking I would post two a week. This would allow me time to draw more pages without the pressure of a deadline. That's not to say I'll slack off, this is what I do for fun!

....Um...I'm a taures, and my favorite color is green. I like first-person shooter games and really don't like the taste of alcohole. I'm not so great with spelling. I used to live in Seoul, South Korea, and I can say about two things: Hello - Anyong-hasaiyo, and Thank you - Com-hamsamnida. I also know how to say stupid - Pabo. Along with my amazing knowledge of the korean language, I can speak spanish very well, but I'm very bad at cooking.

I have worked on these characters and this plot with my 'first mate' Nikita for about 7 years. That's nearly half my life. To actually obtain the ability to draw out what we think is pretty exciting to me, as corny as that sounds. Also, the term 'first mate' has no sexual connotations, lol

This is just a huge bump. ....Diprotodon

Title: Golden Crystals Application
Post by: tickyhead on January 20, 2006, 07:00:11 am
yes yes, most of us landlubbers know what a first mate is. P: All them pirate movies, y'see.

As for your application, I like the art style. Reminds me of the Slayers, except, like, not. I dunno. The comic idea, however...it seems to be a bit generic. (Going to another world and finding out you're someone extremely important and you have to save the world or something and blah de blah de blah sounds a lot like many generic anime plots, not to mention fanfictions XD) I suppose we'll just have to wait and see how it plays out.

Anyway get that site up, and you might just get my approval. :) Not as good as Xepher's, but it's gotta count for something!
Title: Golden Crystals Application
Post by: golden-crystals on January 21, 2006, 06:58:27 am
Yeah, we're aware that the plot is a little cliche, it was made back with we still pretended we were princesses though ^^ But trust me, we're doing everything in our Might Power to pull away from that idea, without changing the general idea of the plot. Thank God we're not saving the world, lol. I guess we might as well add a giant robot, why not?

I'll get the site dressed for visitors soon, right now it's a mess ^^
Title: Golden Crystals Application
Post by: tickyhead on January 21, 2006, 08:19:41 am
Ooooooh giant robot. (actually I hate giant robot anime.....I just do XP) You should also add a really dumb, really short character that is always hyper and says stuff in japanese all the time, (not actual japanese sentences, of course, but the fangirly stuff like "wai" and....whatever else crazy fangirls say...) with lots of hearts and sparkles around her at all times. It has to be a girl, obviously. Most likely with large breasts too.

Oh, and either a penguin or an indecernable animal with a high-pitched squeal of a voice, most likely pink. (the color of eeeeeeevil)

Yeah, we've all had our share of cliche plots. I remember one of mine was......well.....so far most everything I've put out for public viewing was smashed with a hammer until it was barely even hinting of whatever cliched plot it started as (or any plot at all for that matter), but you get my point.
Title: Golden Crystals Application
Post by: golden-crystals on January 22, 2006, 11:50:01 pm
Alright, it's really nothing special, this is basically just the skeleton, so please, don't judge too harshly! I've been a little swamped lately, studying is really all I have time for near the end of the weekend, sorry! But rest assured, once everything calms down a little, I will work on this more. But again, this site is just a skeleton.


Thanks again!
Title: Golden Crystals Application
Post by: golden-crystals on February 05, 2006, 07:53:50 pm

I would like to add to the plot description, as I don't think I really explained what I wanted. I mean I did, but the general lot is kind of cliche, but it's not the main focus by any means.

As our adventure continues, we have our characters thrown into a culture that's unlike any of which they've come from. With a tight cast system, thriving population of oppressed poverty, and no middle class (We all know that's no good), Tidle is on the verge of some economical uproar. When the Jungsan army (Jungsan being Tidle's worse enemy, and the country where Whini is from) starts to beef up again because of the awakening of its king, Tidle gets a little nervous. The people that Tidle has enslaved for the past decade, the Latyans (Where Youthere is from), are Jungsan's primary ally, and Jungsan is pretty pissed that this has happened.

War breaks out as the crew is trying to travel to the Jungsan border, and the land that Tidle conquered when the Jungsan King was asleep (When a Crystal's child is separated from the parent for more than a year, the parent loses 'power' to say, and falls into a coma.) repraise: the land that Tidle conquered is slowly being taken back by the Jungsan army, and the Latyans that the Tidlinians enslaved are being set free to midigate the punishment from the Jungsan army, or the slaves are murdered in masses to spite the army. Either way, Jungsan looks like it's going to gain back the land that Tidle had raped, Latya: one of the countries in where the heir was stolen.

So, hopefully this clears up the cookies and butterflies in the description of the plot earlier, but hopefully doesn't take away the sunshine *^^* I'll throw in a fluffy magical creature that transforms into a robot or a pretty lady in there somewhere, lol
Title: Golden Crystals Application
Post by: RomanceSeries on February 05, 2006, 10:21:38 pm
PICTURES are so nice!
very nicely done.
though the site u got it hosted on is a pain! wow. so many ads.

i wish you good luck on the application!
Title: Golden Crystals Application
Post by: tickyhead on February 05, 2006, 10:29:29 pm
as I side note: AAAAIIIIIIGGGGGE the ads are attacking meeeeee!!! Man I can barely think on that temp site of yours, no offence. you may want to try a temp host that isn't so overbearing. The general website most people reccomend around here (or at least I do :P) is http://www.freewebtown.com. also, as a critique for the layout (what little I could see of it) it usually irks people if they can't figure out where the links are or, once they find them, which one does what. you may want to adjust those adorable little link buttons so that they are easier to notice and tell where they go. Trust me everyone does this at least once >>;

As for the story, I'm wondering if you have any actual pages of said comic? Otherwise your application may fall flat, Xeph supposedly prefers people to have more than an idea and a few character sketches :
Title: Golden Crystals Application
Post by: griever on February 06, 2006, 04:38:40 pm
I like your site design!
Title: Golden Crystals Application
Post by: golden-crystals on February 07, 2006, 04:29:10 pm
Yeah, editing that site and seeing those ads everytime killed a little part of me deep inside...

lol, anyway, I have 24 pages lined and scanned, but only about 9 done, hopefully that's enough ground to judge on though.

Thanks for all the help by the way, I haven't had enought time to search out a decent website, gag. There are so many with false promises, lol
Title: Golden Crystals Application
Post by: golden-crystals on February 20, 2006, 04:33:27 pm
I'm having trouble with freewebtowns. I signed up, like, a week ago and I haven't gotten a password sent to me. ...soooo, I guess I'll just look for another one? But it's evident that I can make and maintain my own website, right? Sans adds.
Title: Golden Crystals Application
Post by: golden-crystals on March 14, 2006, 01:53:11 am
I fixed it! I fixed it! It's no longer swamped with adds *^^* I chose a new layout, and it's not so annoying! yaaaaay! So please accept meeeeeeeee!

Title: Golden Crystals Application
Post by: tickyhead on March 14, 2006, 04:06:31 am
heh... "The . . . . . .Bottom"

much much better :) although the text color up top blends into the header image on my browser. Badly. that's the only thing really, easily fixable. (I am assuming you know HTML? All of your site layouts are made by someone else....)

other than that, good job.
Title: Golden Crystals Application
Post by: golden-crystals on March 14, 2006, 05:44:18 am
Yes, I know HTML, I'm just far too lazy to construct a new layout from scratch, it would probably look pretty much the same either way. So changing images, colors and effects are what I do. I'm always careful to give credit to the original maker though, I'd hate to get in trouble, lol
Title: Golden Crystals Application
Post by: tickyhead on March 14, 2006, 09:17:38 am
Ah yes, I know the whole "lazy" thing very well. Which is why it takes me three months to do a layout I could have done in three hours......
Title: Golden Crystals Application
Post by: dragyn on March 15, 2006, 04:47:43 am
Heh, my layout took 2 days--I made it while I learned HTML, which is why it's so simplistic.  It works though, so I keep it.  

For me, your site looks fine.  Good contrast, good color choice, and nothing blatantly broken--at least, not that I see.  

Good luck on getting accepted--the waiting line is long.
Title: Golden Crystals Application
Post by: golden-crystals on March 15, 2006, 05:38:19 am
Yeah, here's to waiting! *clink* ha ha
Title: Golden Crystals Application
Post by: Munerift on April 02, 2006, 04:21:27 am
Oh I find your layout to be very pleasing... well done!
Title: Golden Crystals Application
Post by: golden-crystals on May 20, 2006, 06:42:20 am
Alright, I went ahead and got an account on Comic Genesis - http://goldencrystals.comicgenesis.com - and it's up and running if anyone would like to see this activly updated and up kept. It's been up for two months, updated 3 times a week. I would still like to keep my application here though. Is that cheating? lol
Title: Golden Crystals Application
Post by: Munerift on May 20, 2006, 03:49:59 pm
Yes, now you're DENIGHED..!

..Just kidding. *huggles*
Title: Golden Crystals Application
Post by: Xepher on June 02, 2006, 07:23:36 am
If I said "yes" would you still be interested?
Title: Golden Crystals Application
Post by: golden-crystals on June 07, 2006, 04:30:24 am
Absolutely ^^
Title: Golden Crystals Application
Post by: Xepher on June 07, 2006, 10:47:22 am
Done. You should have an email with instructions. Please follow them.
Title: Golden Crystals Application
Post by: GabrielsThoughts on June 08, 2006, 07:16:45 pm
I actually like the art and the writing is ok... I don't really like the plot, it reminds me of Alice in wonderland meets Sonic the hedgehog, or DBZ ( but then again that might make it more desireable.)
Title: Golden Crystals Application
Post by: golden-crystals on June 09, 2006, 06:09:31 pm
oh God, something needs to be seriously changed if it reminds ANYONE of DBZ!!! lol, but Alice in Wonderland is ok. But then again, you're right, the plot is a little cliche. We've made several changes, and the focus in no longer on the whole 'She's just a normal girl and now has awesome powers!', lol, it's now more on the culture and relations of the countries and such....yes, this is all just hu-ha bullshit until I actually get to drawing that part.

Everything aside, Thank you for your comment!
Title: Golden Crystals Application
Post by: tickyhead on June 09, 2006, 06:28:55 pm
Anything that involves super powers of some sort and multiple enemies will remind SOMEONE of DBZ. Naruto, Bleach, Inuyasha, Fushigi Yuugi, Sailor Moon, all have been likened to DBZ. Dunno why. There were a ton more too, (oh, yugioh was one) but I can't think of them at the moment.

Anyway, if someone were to make a list of everything that was ever likened to DBZ, it would probably be able to wrap around the world. Twice.
Title: Golden Crystals Application
Post by: golden-crystals on June 09, 2006, 08:07:26 pm
but when I think DBZ, I think disperportional muscles, no plot, funky hair, and those silk button-up T's worn by overweight greasy otakus......*shudder* Whereas the others would be more flattering to be compared to, lol. But there's no flattering here, I just hope I don't remind anyone of DBZ.....directly.......please......
Title: Golden Crystals Application
Post by: tickyhead on June 10, 2006, 04:47:04 am
Ah, but what you think is not what everyone else thinks, and many many MANY people have a very broad range of things that remind them of....other things.

Personally when I think of DBZ I think of freakishly-built body builders and "power up" scenes that last for an entire season, in which they do nothing but go "AAAAAAAH!" and have people (other freakishly-built men mostly >< ugggh, scary) comment on how strong they are. Of which, your comic's plot does not remind me at all.
Title: Golden Crystals Application
Post by: golden-crystals on June 10, 2006, 06:07:18 am
Quote from: tickyhead
Of which, your comic's plot does not remind me at all.
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